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Model composition: A memorable person (example)

Here is a model composition suitable for Primary 5 & 6 - "A memorable person." Below you will find an essay (DRAFT 2) written by one of our students. Our students go through multiple drafts. What you will find in this blogpost is the improved final draft of the composition. Model composition: A memorable person (example)



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Model composition a memorable person example

Student: Shweta Krishnan, P5 (Improved version)

Pictures given: Soccer ball / pen / cat





Model composition: A memorable person (example)


We meet plenty of people in our day-to-day lives. Many hardly leave an impression on us. However, a handful leave an indelible mark in our psyches, stimulating our spirits to reach higher horizons. Like a comet bolting out of the blue, they come into our lives, changing us forever for the better. I keep a very special pen in my pencil case. It may look ordinary. It is, after all, a simple ball-point pen. However, for me, it is special. It was given to me by my English teacher, Mrs. Grace, one Friday morning. A Friday morning that will change my life forever. The day is still fresh in my memories. The dew glistened on the freshly cut grass as I headed to school. It was Sports Day, and I was anticipating it with excitement. I am not the sharpest tool in the shed; I barely pass my examinations. For a simpleton like me, Sports Day is the day I can shine. I worked day and night for the running race. My teachers particularly despised me. Who can blame them? I was known to be disruptive, often making my teachers blow their tops. Mrs. Grace was no exception. I was certain she disliked me as well. Little did I know, my impression of her would change forever.


The sports day commenced with much pomp and fanfare. Students dressed in flaming colours packed the stadium amongst a plethora of colourful displays of banners and decorations. I was feeling hyped and ready for the race. As the cue to start running announced itself with an air pistol, I took to action, running as fast as the wind. My eyes were on the prize, quite literally too! I wanted to win first place so I could qualify for the national race. I was close to the finish line when I felt an agonising pain shooting up my leg. Oh no! Not a cramp. Before I knew it, my face met the floor. I saw my chances of winning the race dwindle to non-existence.


However, I did not give up. I got up and took to my heels. Unfortunately, I didn’t make it to first place. In fact, I was last. I could sense my classmates snickering at me. All my hard work went down the drain. I stood there at the prize-giving ceremony with dismay etched across my face. The teacher who was giving away prizes was Mrs. Grace. “I bet she’s happy!” I muttered. However, nothing could prepare me for the next moment. “Andrei! Please come to the stage!” I heard her call my name. I felt disconcerted, thinking she was calling me up to publicly embarrass me. With shaky legs, I went up to the stage. “Everyone wants to crown the winners. But I’d like to crown a special person for effort. Andrei did not give up, despite knowing he barely had a chance. I don’t have a trophy, but I’d like to offer him a special pen for his special effort.” She boomed on the microphone for all to hear. It was a heart- warming moment.


That is the reason why I still hold on to the pen to remind me of this very special person. Call me sentimental, but today I am a successful person thanks to Mrs. Grace. She is truly a memorable person! Thanks to her inspiration, I not only passed my examinations with flying colours, but I also became a successful sportsman in my community. I learned that it is better to try and fail than never try at all!

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